and the “Duh, dude” Award goes to…

… this little gem:

Jhayni awoke, thrashing in the sweaty tangled sheets like a panicked swimmer in water.

In water, as opposed to, say, Jell-O. Or lava. Or orange juice. *headdesk*

Progress: 137/244 pages

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  1. dkoren says:

    Hee! I think we all have those floating around waiting to be eliminated in our writing!

  2. Rabia says:

    :D

    Sometimes I wonder if there are drugs in the hot chocolate I drink while writing…

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